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TMIL3: Chapter 3For an eternity Kiyone gazed at Washu with a puzzled, eye twitching stare. Her mind was full of bewilderment, followed by anger. Why was she doing this she wondered? So lost in thought was she that she failed to notice Ryoko suddenly appearing in front of her.TMIL3: Chapter 3 by apple-kitty
"Gah!" Kiyone yelped with surprise, nearly jumping out of her skin. "Uh... what?"
Ryoko was staring at her chest. She looked her over from head to toe "Looks the same to me," then informally poked her breasts and turned back to face Washu with a brow irritably raised. "Have you been drinking my Sake?"
"Wait," Ayeka butted in and walked closer. "Those breasts do look bigger," (Kiyone sweatdropped) "She does look more mature."
Kiyone looked utterly dumbfounded listening to not only Ryoko, but Ayeka talking about her breasts. Irritably, she rubbed the confusion from her forehead as she spoke "Is this how you tell people from the future apart? All of you?"
"No need to be so embarrassed." waved Ryoko, and then leaned in close whisperi
Writing Effective DialogueWe've all struggled through figuring out how to write dialogue that not only gets the information out there, but also helps build characters or advance the plot. There are tons of books and blogs out there on the topic, too. But just reading about it doesn't do much good if we're not ready to try it out. Give it a go and see what other people think. But let's start with the basics.Writing Effective Dialogue by GrimFace242
What is Effective Dialogue?
Dialogue that's written well will reveal character traits, add to the tension and suspense, helps cut down on text walls of description and of course, advances your plot. One of the most important things to keep in mind when you're writing dialogue is that in fiction, your reader doesn't want to read all the mundane things we say on a regular basis. So if it's not moving the plot or adding to your character's personality, you should think about cutting it completely.
What do I mean by reveals character traits?